You think you are going to remember every punishment and big test and rainy day. You think you are going to remember every punishment, big test, and rainy day.
The first peach slithers down his throat like rapture. A sunrise in his mouth. They eat. They drink the syrup. They run their fingers around the inside of the can.
Reenter your writing. Reread. Look for places that need more details. Put an asterisk. Close your eyes. Picture your story. What do you see, hear, smell, taste, or feel? Make a list of 3 things. Add the sentence (with ands or commas).