DEVELOPING COMMENTARY EXAMPLES

EXAMPLE 1: THE TEXT

EXAMPLE 1: THE PROMPT

• The poem is an example of an extended metaphor. Explain how this metaphor works in the context of the poem. What two things are being compared? Include supporting evidence from the text in order to prove your claim.

EXAMPLE 1: THE RESPONSE

REVIEWING THE DEVELOPMENT OF COMMENTARY

• The writer stated his claim: negative qualities of summer compare to Shakespeare's love
• The writer uses appropriate evidence to back up his claim
• The writer generates his commentary by connecting the evidence back to the claim as done in every sentence after evidence

EXAMPLE 2: PROMPT

• How does the speaker (from Arragon's speech in Merchant of Venice) create Ethos? (Be sure to include quote, technique, and commentary.)

EXAMPLE 2: THE RESPONSE

REVIEW ON THE DEVELOPING OF COMMENTARY

• The writer stated the claim that ethos was used by appealing to personal identity through the insulting of Portia
• Provides sufficient evidence
• Commentary connects to the claim in the response

Example 3