Zoom to a Narrow Focus

Equality vs. Narrow Focus

• Equality is when you give all of your events equal time and space
• Should eating breakfast be as important as winning the race?
• Focus your writing on just one main event
• "Zoom" can be compared to the compass of the writing: it keeps it on track.

Mark McGwire is a famous baseball player who hit a record-setting home run.

Imagine:

• 30 years after the famous home run, he is telling his grandchildren
• Would he begin his story with what he ate for breakfast?
• Would he talk about his drive to the stadium that day?
• Or would he tell about the most important event, which was the home run?

What do readers want?
Readers want a writer to fast-forward through the boring, everyday events and focus on the main event of the story.

READ how Mark McGwire would tell about the home run if he told about this one important event:
http://tinyurl.com/narrowfocus

How to apply this to your writing

• BRIEFLY set-up your story
• EXPAND on the main event
• BRIEFLY reflect on what happened

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In Class Practice- In the following samples:

• In class tomorrow, you will be expected to:
• Identify whether or not the examples have zoom
• If so, what type of zoom is used
• You will write your answer down on a notecard
• Turn the notecard in to Coach Chordas

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DON'T FORGET:
TURN IN YOUR NOTECARD
AND APPLY THIS TO YOUR PAPER!